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"I love you" were the words you said to me
According to you we were meant to be
So why are you not by my side?
My heart is breaking on the inside
I knew I should have never have trusted you
I knew you were too good to be true
Poem about heartbreak. Not based on personal experience
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Gubblefuck Featured By Owner 4 days ago  New Deviant
Maybe he left you because you fucking suck at writing.

gg no re
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LazyEyeCrazyI Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I never knew it would hurt this bad. =(
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nobodys-listening010 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I love it. It really speaks to me. I think it reminds me of my ex-boyfriend...I should have been better to him. :( Good job~
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PrincessMiku16 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Amazing!
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zZzTattyiannazZz Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
So True
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WordsUnspoken32 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
I loved this girl so much...we had so much fun when we talked to each other and I thought this was the female version of me..we dated for a while and I started thinking "hey maybe the universe is gonna cut me some slack and let thing just be ok" but then another guy came into the picture..he was everything I wasn't. Strong, muscular, handsome. The girl fell head over heels for him and her friends had already been telling her that I wasn't cute enough for her. I was dumped and she and him started dating..its a high school crush I shouldn't be this devastated but who understands human emotions? My world has been just a pit of black since then..anyone else experience a bad breakup and wanna talk about it with someone they DON'T see in real life? Swing my way.
GREAT PIECE OF LITERATURE!!!
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HolyToni Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"Not cute enough for her"? You don't seem very not-cute to me...
I was just called a "tamagotchi" by my ex-gilfriend who broke up with this "let's just be friends again"-line because I wanted her to pay some attention to me...pfff, I guess it would be kinda easier to be angry at her, but I can't because I don't know any other way for her to be satisfied in a relationship with me when she doesn't love me anymore...whatever.
It's amazing what feelings poems like this can trigger, I hope the author isn't annoyed by all the unlucky love storys under their post ^^"
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Kelsey427 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I've spent the last month thinking about this woman I love very much. Speaking to her on occasion. Hangig out a couple times. Loving her since the moment we met.
We've been broken up for a month.
I know it's only a month, but this woman. She brought me back to life after like 13 years. I miss her so much.
Yet, she doens't miss me.
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Silly-Little-Ginger Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I was broken up with yesterday, and this describes exactly what I'm going through
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chobitskitty Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
definitely sounds like what im going thru
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NynyWeenie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:heart:
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TheFloatingFish Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
I dated this guy for almost a year. He said he loved me. He bought me a promise ring. Said we were going to get married one day. He lied.
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ScotchNvl Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I dated my best friend for 5 years. She said she loved me. She said we'd live together forever. She lied.
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MrsCuddlesworth Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
I dated this guy for 5 months. He said he loved me. He said he would never cheat. He lied.
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xxMarionetteX Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012
Exactly what happens to me all the time...
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
Thanks for all the fab comments
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LemonLovesWMB Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is perfectly what I was thinking! (excuse my grammer) I Love it!!
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Chibi-Pineapple Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
So true it seems like you must know something about heart-break...
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PirateHunter4ev Featured By Owner May 13, 2011  Student General Artist
wow. this happened to me about
a week ago and its like you looked riht in my heart good job :)
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ashohsarus Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011
ive felt exactly like this. its painful. ive been heartbroken many times but the mosr recent hurt worse because i gave him my all and trusted him with everything
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emokid114 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
this is really good:)
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x-Rosiebud Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
sums up my personal experience exactly :/
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2010
Aww, sorry to hear you went through that
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x-Rosiebud Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
thanks :/ :hug:
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erukalice Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Short, simple and easy to relate to. I like it; great job :)
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Thank you so much
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watrmiln Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Loveeee it.
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2010
Thanks
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Brass-Captain Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2010   Writer
The Heart is a sensative thing... I just delt with this and I feel exactly how this poem reads right now... It's like... it's all gonna end....... :sadangel: On a better note, well spoken!
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Mizuki-Anya Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoever broke up with you is a dick, its been more than two monthes since i earned a broken heart, still feels like the world is black.
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WordsUnspoken32 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Me too..breakups suck don't they?
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xXXxemoninjaxXXx Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2010
bit redundant... i kinda already knew your heart was on the inside.... u insult my intelligence.... but other than that it was good, and believe me... i know how you feel, and it's not great
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ChocolateQuill Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009  Student General Artist
and this is what can be called, short and...brilliant!
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009
Thank you and thanks for the :+fav:
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Evilangel642 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully written, I love it! Favorited!
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
Thank you so much
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Bad-Girl-YYY-fan Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
This is so amazing...I feel like that right now...

The only difference is that my ex is still my friend...
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ChocolateQuill Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009  Student General Artist
that happens to the best of us ^ ^.
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Bad-Girl-YYY-fan Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2010
Lol, you're right
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HawtZausy Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
My life story much...

YOU MADE ME CRY T~T

Great nonetheless.
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PoeticPinkie Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2009
This is great...it says it all....
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2009
Aww, thank you so much.
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dancer-lost-in-music Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009  Hobbyist
i can relate...
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foundguilty Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2009
I know how this feels. The thing with that though is I still want him to be happy even if it's with someone else. Good job on the poem by the way.
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2009
Thank you so much
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foundguilty Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2009
Your welcome
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ElvenAngel81 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2009
I agree with ~xbritt143rhcpx... It just happened to me today, and this was what I was thinking. So touching and beautiful :)
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
Thank you
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xbritt143rhcpx Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2008
wow... that's like you read my mind and put in into words... it's very beautiful :]
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aushpluva Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2008
Thank you
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